Cyber security event to raise awareness about current pressing issue
By Khang, July 1st 2025
In Cyber town, a large event raising awareness about cybersecurity
happened yesterday. Hundreds of local residents have gathered at the town
center to participate in the event. The event was organized by the mayor
and other volunteers with the help of tech experts from the local
cybersecurity firm Eliot. The event features activity like demonstrations,
interactive booths, and talks that aims to help the public understand the
importance of cybersecurity.
The event begin with a speech by tech expert Mr. Bond, who raise the
importance of having a good cyber security due to increasing in online fraud,
data theft, and losing their identity. Participant then participates in session
that help creating a strong passwords, recognizing fraudulent emails, and
also dangerous websites that could install virus into their computers, and
also about protecting personal data on online websites like social media.
For younger participant, the event offer interactive game that teach them
about the importance of cyber security, and for the adult the event offer
session on protecting their banking account.
For the local business, the event help them to protecting their company
system to prevent leak of information to happen or for the companies system
to be hack in some way.
There were a lot of posivite feedback on the event as we can see with a few
of the comment below:
“This event really is useful, I would never known that it would be so easy to
get your identity stolen, luckily I manage to learn a few trick to prevent that”
“I have encountered some problem with cyber security recently and the
event has help me quite a bit in resolving and preventing these issues”
“I think this event is really helpful for the kids, as they would be the
generation who would encounter the most technology and has to worry
about these problem the most compare to the older generation”
The event was concluded with the cybersecyruty firm Eliot creating a forum
that people can ask question about their personal concern on cyber security
issue. Due to the support and the positive feedback of the people
participating in the event, the mayor has decided that a similar event would
be held on the same day annual to teach and raise awareness about the
important of cyber security for adult as well as the younger generation.
Criterion Breakdown:
Criterion A: Language – 2/5
The article conveys basic meaning, but numerous grammar and structure
issues reduce clarity. There are consistent errors with tense, subject-verb
agreement, article use, and word form.
Criterion B: Message – 4/5
The main purpose of the article—to report on a local cybersecurity event—is
clear. The piece includes appropriate information such as event organizers,
participants, and types of activities.
Criterion C: Conceptual Understanding – 4/5
The student demonstrates a solid grasp of the format of a news report,
including headline, byline, structured paragraphs, and direct quotes. Tone is
mostly appropriate, though not consistently professional or polished.
Strengths:
Good structure: The article follows a recognizable format with headline,
date, and report-style writing.
Clear purpose: The article effectively informs readers about the event’s
objective.
Specific details: The writing covers key event highlights, including
speakers, activities, and participant reactions.
Inclusion of quotes: Using feedback from participants enhances
engagement and realism.
Areas for Improvement:
1. Grammar and Tense Usage
Use consistent past tense for reporting: e.g. "begin" → "began",
"raise" → "raised".
Improve subject-verb agreement: e.g. "participant... participates" →
"participants participated".
2. Spelling and Word Form
Correct spelling mistakes: "posivite" → positive, "cybersecyruty" →
cybersecurity.
Use correct word forms: "has help me" → has helped me, "protecting"
→ protect.
3. Sentence Structure and Clarity
Avoid long, unclear sentences:
Original: "the event help them to protecting their company system to
prevent leak of information to happen..."
Improved: "The event helped local businesses learn how to protect their
systems and prevent data leaks."
Avoid repetition: e.g. overusing "and also" or repeating ideas in one
sentence.
Bản rewrite:
Cybersecurity Event Raises Community Awareness
By Khang, July 1st, 2025
Yesterday in Cyber Town, a major event took place to raise public
awareness about the growing importance of cybersecurity.
Hundreds of residents gathered at the town center to take part in
an informative and engaging program organized by the mayor, a
team of dedicated volunteers, and cybersecurity professionals from
the local tech firm Eliot.
The event featured a wide range of activities including live
demonstrations, interactive booths, and expert-led workshops.
These sessions were designed to educate participants on how to
stay safe online and protect their personal information in the face of
increasing cyber threats.
The event began with an opening speech by Mr. Bond, a
cybersecurity expert from Eliot. He emphasized the urgency of
online safety, citing rising cases of identity theft, online fraud, and
data breaches. Following the keynote, attendees took part in hands-
on sessions that covered topics such as creating strong passwords,
identifying phishing emails, avoiding malicious websites, and
protecting personal data on social media platforms.
Interactive games were also provided for younger participants to
help them understand cybersecurity basics in a fun and accessible
way. Adults attended specialized sessions focused on securing
personal bank accounts and safely managing online transactions.
Local businesses were not left out. The event offered guidance on
safeguarding company systems, preventing data leaks, and avoiding
hacking attempts. Business owners expressed appreciation for the
practical advice they received.
The event received overwhelmingly positive feedback from
attendees. One participant shared,
“This event was incredibly helpful. I didn’t realize how easy it was
for someone to steal your identity online. I’ve now learned several
ways to protect myself.”
Another added,
“I’ve recently had cybersecurity problems, and this event gave me
tools and knowledge to avoid future issues.”
A parent commented,
“This was especially helpful for kids. They are growing up with
technology and need to know how to stay safe more than anyone
else.”
The event concluded with the launch of a new community forum
hosted by Eliot, where residents can ask cybersecurity-related
questions and receive expert support. Due to the strong turnout and
enthusiastic response, the mayor announced that the event would
become an annual tradition, held every July 1st to promote online
safety for people of all ages.
